Wednesday, June 23, 2010

My best writting

His wrinkles look like a puzzle and go deep into his face as if someones pushed them into his skin.

What did I do well? Destab and put my voice into it.

What did I learn? To put personnalty into writting.

What is my next learning step? To make a smaer sentes.

1 comment:

  1. I LOVE this sentence, Kelly. You've really thought hard about what words to use and you've used them well.

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